(This is not the actual picture we responded too, however this is the idea that had plopped into my mind when I originally viewed the image.)
"The white flowers,
blooming in the day,
filling the world with bright juicy oranges
thousands upon thousands of trees
completed with these oranges
leaves upon leaves
miles upon miles
but the oranges, even though they are plentiful
die off in the cold, frigid winters
the nights reaching low temperatures
and the oranges fall, crushed and ruined
until the next year comes
and the oranges bloom again"
I enjoyed this response because I liked how I could take things from the picture and visualize and describe how this image would look like in my head. I also think that I have improved this piece by using repetition, saying thousands upon thousands, leaves upon leaves, miles upon miles. This helps show unity (and yes I know that sounds cheesy) through the poem that I had wrote. Rather than the poem consisting of random thoughts, splattered across my brain, it now sounds like one picture.
Another jornal that I had written, was a response to the poem, "Hand Shadows ". This poem was about shadow puppets, and how they moved. I responded to this poem by writing a desperate poem, describing what I pictured in my head as I listened to the original piece. I tried to illustrate how shadow puppets are like silent whispers, they can communicate but not make a sound at the same time.
"Silent whispers
shadows move
communicating without a word
quiet shuffling
the hands
leaving only the message
quickly switching into new shapes
new stories
but all connected somehow
shadows dancing across a blank canvas
painting it into a sea of colors"
I like this journal response because I liked how I had created something different from an idea. Most people would think of a small, singular shape when they think of shadow puppet. But in this response, I tried to expand that, and add how all of the shapes create a story together. I also enjoyed writing how the puppets are silent. I think this allowed the viewer to maybe see how I think of something differently then other people may. Of course the shadow puppets are not completely silent, but I like the idea of siilent whispers and and the sound of the puppets may be so small that they may as well be silent. Overall, over the course of the first quarter I really enjoyed how we were able to respond to these poems in our journals and this allowed me to really add to my wrinting and make it better and better each day by using different methods, trying new responses and list practicing making really authentic and creative journals.
